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Apr 14, 2022·edited Apr 14, 2022Author

Enough melody

to drag my bones from hiding

and move once again.

You need to hear it

even when you’re convinced you don’t.

I think you are great.

The looming dimness

with outbursts of blinding light.

There is still hope left.

It’s funny really

how people become life lines -

they use love as bait.

That last one has so much potential to be more. I’m going to transform it into a big piece. The imagery of us being lost in the lake and somebody fishing us out using their life line - it has legs that’s for sure!

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Apr 14, 2022Liked by Ash Raymond James, Hellokoo+

It just exhausts me

Looking at this video

She really needs rest

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Apr 15, 2022Liked by Ash Raymond James, Hellokoo+

I arrive and leave

In the dark, desk-bound, sky-less

Outside , the earth turns

//

Maybe we can just

Be together in silence

You with the grey hair

Maybe we will find

All the odd things about us

We have in common

Maybe we could go

And sit on a bench, sunlit

But keep our shades on

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Apr 13, 2022Liked by Ash Raymond James

This is a great song, just doesn’t ring true for me. Cancer is a lonely journey, and it becomes easy to isolate and grieve. I believe I live authentically, as what others think of me is usually not my business. But here ya go

wake up every day

living with uncertainty

takes the joy away

So I could just do a people pleasing, uplifting haiku inspired by the song, but just doing me.

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Apr 21, 2022Liked by Hellokoo+

Spunky funky voice

Spaghetti western guitar

Yes I think you're great

Just the way you are

Past the coffee shop counter

On happy sad days

Debbie

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Apr 21, 2022Liked by Hellokoo+

In all this crazy rush

Detach yourself and rejoice.

You are everything.

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Apr 20, 2022Liked by Hellokoo+

Dimples and dark eye

A pleasing smile, formal suit

Hair down end of day

/

Sound of strummed guitar

Laughter ringing around friends

Shoulder lean, you’re great

/

The beat of the drum

Echoes the dance of my heart

Celebrating me (Because I am great…)

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Apr 16, 2022Liked by Hellokoo+

Thanks. I didn’t connect with the music or the video, their lives seemed awful, even the “happy” bits. I spotted the first guy with shades on and it reminded me of times I’ve genuinely connected with people. I thought, he looks ok.

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